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26th Jul 2011, 4:35 AM

kyupol

Comic Review: Pyrrhic world

Pyrrhic world
http://pyrrhicworld.thecomicseries.com/
Comic about some dude and some chick going to some concert... set in a fantasy world full of monsters.  

Art - 2.5/5
- perspective needs some work
- lineart clean enough.  
- Points for being creative and coming up with monster designs.

Story - 3/5
- lmao!  I'd give you points for the humor.  I actually like your sense of humor.  :)
- But sorry... I am a little bored with the plot in of it itself.  

Delivery - 1.5/5
- panel flow understandable enough
- text is hard to read.  Can you use a computer... please?
- Its hard to tell who is who.  
http://pyrrhicworld.thecomicseries.com/comics/first/ (who is baripper?  who is deadomancer?)
- too many words on a page.  For instance:
http://pyrrhicworld.thecomicseries.com/comics/9 (this comic can be split in 2 pages)

Overall Impression - 2.5/5
- Maybe typing out the text and adding some colors will help?  And maybe add some more interesting stuff that happens? Too much dialog without much gets boring.  The panty humor tends to be an ice-breaker to break the boringness with some lulz.  Hahaha.   
 

26th Jul 2011, 4:31 AM

kyupol

Comic Review: Ghost House

Ghost House
http://ghosthouse.thecomicseries.com/
A comic about a new ghost... some dude who just figured out he's dead.  And now he is out to do some detective work about his own death.  

Art - 3/5
- art needs some refinement but otherwise decent.  
- coloring is ok.  
- perspective a little off in some areas
http://ghosthouse.thecomicseries.com/comics/11 (panel 1 house)
- could use a ruler for straight lines... for instance:
http://ghosthouse.thecomicseries.com/comics/6 (picture frames)
- proportions a little off for instance:
http://ghosthouse.thecomicseries.com/comics/7 (Watson's hands too short)

Story - 3.5/5
- Story looks interesting and decent enough.  But its not something that will get me hooked on it.    
- My only comment is that there seems to be too many characters.  
http://ghosthouse.thecomicseries.com/comics/8/
Is this gonna be an epic story in where all of these characters will get developed?  Who knows?  

Delivery - 4/5
- panel flow very easy to understand
- need to use dynamic camera angles.  Too many "talking head" scenes

Overall Impression - 3.5 / 5
- Not bad.  Just improve here and there (read any "how to draw" book or take up some art courses or just go practice practice and more practice) and all will be fine.  :)
- Writing skill seems to be ok.